And in the bakery where I am, I start to get a delicious smell of freshly baked muffins, I am hungry...now smells like chocolate croissants....I want to try....A guy comes into the bakery, He looks at me, I look at him...I close my eyes...I lose my jelly bean buttons, my legs melt in your mouth...
By Álvaro Escobar
Is this a story about a cookie? At the beginning I thought this story talked about a person, but then I realized in the last line it was about a cookie! I like because it makes you laugh or smile when you get it. It´s funny!
ReplyDeleteI think that it´s a fantastic story where you change the whole context with the last line. I like all the unreal storys, but this surprise me more than the others that I´ve read before.
ReplyDeleteCongratulations!!!
Borja Rodríguez
ReplyDeleteI think the same that my classmate david. The story change in the last line, where you understand the story. It´s surprising!
This story makes us laugh with its surprising ending. It manages to defeat our expectations. It also presents a powerful, captivating imagery. It’s quite original, I like this story a lot!
ReplyDeleteIrene Fernández R.
I like this story because it's surprising ending and it's funny.
ReplyDeleteMARÍA LUZ SÁNCHEZ
I think your story is very good, because you get that when the reader begins to read, he believed that is a normal person, in a daily situation and in a single line changes the whole meaning of the story. I read your story five times, I like the story
ReplyDeletesweety and funny story :)
ReplyDeleteLaura Paz
Hello!
ReplyDeleteI agree with my classmates: Great story!
According to the assessment criteria you have chosen an amazing character "a man-cooky",you have done a powerful description and the ending is really surprising!
Good job!
Elsa Castillo